The Investment:

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You’ll come away with clarity, direction, and the confidence to keep writing.

Let's Start the Fire!
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IGNITE THE STORY:

THE FIRST 20-PAGES

You’ve got words on the page. Maybe a few chapters. Maybe a whole messy draft.

But something feels off.

You can’t tell if your opening is pulling readers in or quietly losing them. And that uncertainty? It’s exhausting.

Before you throw the whole thing in the garbage, let’s take a fresh look at what’s really happening in those first 20 pages.

The opening of your story is everything. It’s the foundation for what’s to come. This package will help you figure out what is shining, what’s stumbling, and what just needs a little fine-tuning.

This isn’t about ripping your story apart. It’s about understanding what you’ve built so you can strengthen it and move forward with confidence.

What’s Included:

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Inline Comments
In-depth feedback written directly in your pages, exploring the emotional layers beneath the plot, pinpointing where your reader might drift, and showing you exactly where your story already works.

Mini Blueprint Evaluation
A guided questionnaire to help get clear on what your book is really about, why it matters, and where it’s headed.

Editorial Letter
A big-picture analysis that connects the dots between your story’s vision, structure, and emotional impact so you can see how it all fits or where it’s wobbling.

Next Steps
Tailored advice to help you write your story forward : clear, compassionate guidance that gives you a real plan for revision, not just a list of problems.

60-Minute Coaching Call
We’ll meet to unpack your feedback, answer your questions, and get you unstuck. No judgment, no confusion. Just an honest conversation that keeps your creative momentum going.

Who It’s For:

This is perfect for new fiction writers who have a starting point or even a full rough draft but aren’t sure if the story is on target. You want honest, big-picture feedback without any judgment. You’re ready to roll up your sleeves, learn, and improve your story.

The Hype Girl Promise

I’ll always tell the truth; straight up, no sugarcoating, and definitely not like an asshole.

I’m here to help you turn those first 20 pages into something that burns bright.

Equal parts story coach, emotional support human, and snack enthusiast

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